> Good ident but music needs to be different from the music in the film as an ident is a separate moving image in itself.
> Comic sans is a very unprofessional typography, change! You can use something simple like Times New Roman which is timeless. Think carefully about the colour and design of the text –the gradient on the text is unattractive and distracting. Usually simple ideas are the most effective.
~ Good opening/establishing shot (panning down) setting the scene/location of the film.
> Consider adding transitions such as fade in/out on titles. Think about typography very carefully; choose a font style that reflects on your genre and storyline. You can look at dafont.com and download various fonts. Also consider the size of the text and how much space it takes up on screen. What do you want to be the main focus? Image or text? How much importance does one have over the other or are they equal? Think about where you are placing your text too.
~ The shot from the mcguffin should have continued on to show the car –there shouldn’t be a cut in the middle. Artistic sun flare looks nice.
> Lead with sound –let the background music continue for a second into the next shot and fade out. This creates a smoother transition from one shot to the next.
~ Would have been better if you had taken another shot of Arbaaz and Altin in the car from the front.
~ Good use of close up on hand starting car.
~ The shot of the puddle looks a bit random and composition isn’t great especially with the wheel of a car showing on the top left of the frame -it would have been better to have taken it from a lower angle and gotten closer to the puddle so you could see the rain falling. Shoot creatively when possible, it’s easy to do that with cut away shots.
> Cut the shot of inside the car whilst driving shorter –its far too long. You can’t hear the dialogue in the car when Eric walks past. Consider doing a voice over and adding it in.
~ Good point of view shot from the boot –unfortunately you have rain drop on the screen. Make sure to always keep the camera clean in future.
~ Generally good camera work –steady and decent panning.
~ CU of Eric in the alley could better e.g. taken from front on. And his acting could be improved –he looks like he’s almost smiling. Fight scene done quite well.
> Good choice of music and sound effect. Increase the length of time of the heart beat by a couple of seconds and fade in and out.
> Good ident but music needs to be different from the music in the film as an ident is a separate moving image in itself.
ReplyDelete> Comic sans is a very unprofessional typography, change! You can use something simple like Times New Roman which is timeless. Think carefully about the colour and design of the text –the gradient on the text is unattractive and distracting. Usually simple ideas are the most effective.
~ Good opening/establishing shot (panning down) setting the scene/location of the film.
> Consider adding transitions such as fade in/out on titles. Think about typography very carefully; choose a font style that reflects on your genre and storyline. You can look at dafont.com and download various fonts. Also consider the size of the text and how much space it takes up on screen. What do you want to be the main focus? Image or text? How much importance does one have over the other or are they equal? Think about where you are placing your text too.
~ The shot from the mcguffin should have continued on to show the car –there shouldn’t be a cut in the middle. Artistic sun flare looks nice.
> Lead with sound –let the background music continue for a second into the next shot and fade out. This creates a smoother transition from one shot to the next.
~ Would have been better if you had taken another shot of Arbaaz and Altin in the car from the front.
~ Good use of close up on hand starting car.
~ The shot of the puddle looks a bit random and composition isn’t great especially with the wheel of a car showing on the top left of the frame -it would have been better to have taken it from a lower angle and gotten closer to the puddle so you could see the rain falling. Shoot creatively when possible, it’s easy to do that with cut away shots.
> Cut the shot of inside the car whilst driving shorter –its far too long. You can’t hear the dialogue in the car when Eric walks past. Consider doing a voice over and adding it in.
~ Good point of view shot from the boot –unfortunately you have rain drop on the screen. Make sure to always keep the camera clean in future.
~ Generally good camera work –steady and decent panning.
~ CU of Eric in the alley could better e.g. taken from front on. And his acting could be improved –he looks like he’s almost smiling. Fight scene done quite well.
> Good choice of music and sound effect. Increase the length of time of the heart beat by a couple of seconds and fade in and out.
~ The shot of Callum is a bit off.